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on 11/19/2015, 7:40 am
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dang, two animations I should finish Very Happy
still I need to finish this first before the dummy bash (still looking for other characters).
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on 11/19/2015, 8:49 am
So far that is looking really nice!

I felt the text was moving from one sentence to the next pretty quickly. you may want to try to condense the sentences down a bit and lengthen how long their on the screen by like half a second or something. Also, you may wanna space the characters out just a bit. Right now they seem kinda close which gives a bit of a slight clustered feeling. Those aren't major things tho and really you can ignore this if ya want.

Something that does need to be changed however is when the first character says "I don't even sense suspicious in here." I think it sorta sounds weird. I think it would read better if it said "I don't even feel any suspicion in here." Though honestly even that sounds a bit strange to me, so it may be better to rework the sentence to "I don't even sense any danger in here."

Also while all this is going on you can move the camera a bit faster. Actually, it'd probably be better to do that and zoom in on the character a bit more so we can focus on that character more.

Lastly, when she stops running and slides in the beginning she slides a bit too far. She didn't seem like she was running that fast to slide that much lol it makes it seem like she was running on ice or something.

I'm really liking the combat so far though. It looks really good. Keep it up!
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on 11/19/2015, 12:21 pm
@Rapidfir3Pho3nix wrote:Something that does need to be changed however is when the first character says "I don't even sense suspicious in here." I think it sorta sounds weird. I think it would read better if it said "I don't even feel any suspicion in here." Though honestly even that sounds a bit strange to me, so it may be better to rework the sentence to "I don't even sense any danger in here."
oh man, my ENGLISH!

@Rapidfir3Pho3nix wrote:Lastly, when she stops running and slides in the beginning she slides a bit too far. She didn't seem like she was running that fast to slide that much lol it makes it seem like she was running on ice or something.
It's a boy XD

anyway Thx a lot ^^
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on 11/19/2015, 12:59 pm
@blackstar360 wrote:It's a boy XD

WHY IS HE WEARING A SKIRT??
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on 11/19/2015, 1:06 pm
@Rapidfir3Pho3nix wrote:WHY IS HE WEARING A SKIRT??
LOL, there is a short inside of it.
because theyre wearing just like a black people in a forests (idk what to call them XD)
but yeah.
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on 11/19/2015, 7:21 pm
@blackstar360 wrote:
LOL, there is a short inside of it.
because theyre wearing just like a black people in a forests (idk what to call them XD)
but yeah.

oh so he's basically an african lmao
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on 1/28/2016, 8:30 am
This is false advertising....I was expecting him...

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on 1/28/2016, 5:26 pm
^animate him urself Razz

I'd be fucking down to watch it
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on 1/28/2016, 6:56 pm
.....someday....

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